At present more and more people consider that animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings. These people, however, note that animals could be used if there is no evidence that they suffer in any way.

point of view has strong and wears sides.
On the other hand
people used to utilize animals for food, clothes, sports etc., and we can say that there is no real substitution for meat and milk,
for example
. Could we say that animals do not suffer when they are killed? If we say that we don’t want animals to suffer in any way we should reject eating beef and become and chickens.
the other
hand we
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hand, we
can give up using animals for clothes and sports. We could stop wearing furs, we could
stop races as we don’t really know whether horses enjoy them.
final the right way we should decide what are the frames of the statement “no suffer in using animals for human’s purposes”. We should
decide what kinds of using of animals we can refuse without damaging the
health/ we should
create rules of painless use of animals or try to make
pain as small as we can. In my opinion, we should stop using animals for pleasure and joy if it has
influence badly on them. We must use animals only for our real needs. We should
do our best to prevent animals from suffering starvation and useless killing.
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