At present more and more people consider that animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings. These people, however, note that animals could be used if there is no evidence that they suffer in any way.

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This

point of view has strong and wears sides.

On the other hand

people used to utilize animals for food, clothes, sports etc., and we can say that there is no real substitution for meat and milk,

for example

. Could we say that animals do not suffer when they are killed? If we say that we don’t want animals to suffer in any way we should reject eating beef and become and chickens.

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the other

hand we

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hand, we

can give up using animals for clothes and sports. We could stop wearing furs, we could

also

stop races as we don’t really know whether horses enjoy them.

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Two

final the right way we should decide what are the frames of the statement “no suffer in using animals for human’s purposes”. We should

also

decide what kinds of using of animals we can refuse without damaging the

human’s

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human

health/ we should

also

create rules of painless use of animals or try to make

this

pain as small as we can. In my opinion, we should stop using animals for pleasure and joy if it has

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influence badly on them. We must use animals only for our real needs. We should

also

do our best to prevent animals from suffering starvation and useless killing.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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