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some people say the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. do you agree or disagree? give some relevant examples due to your experience.

#people #work
We believed that, paying the
staff
 or
employee
 depend on their produce and sell, will encourage them to
work
 harder than if they will get basic salary. I totally agree with that to pay more you will get more
also
.
Firstly
, One of the best way to motivate our
staff
 to
work
 hard is paying them like a percentage of selling
.
Accept space
.
 Let's say we have a product how
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will encourage my
employee
 to sell it, we are genuine
work
 with basic salary and commission, so he will do his best to gain more money.
Secondly
, I will share my previous experience with working as a sales manager end, we have our target all of us trying to reach our target to get the incentive. It's like the
company
 share a profit with the
employee
, which they will feel them growing. Not only just doing your
work
 and go. You are one of our team one family, we are sharing our product,
As a result
, the
company
 name is growing
also
 by the
staff
 so why not to share some of the profit to
staff
, particularly the good sealer is a huge value for the
company
. Admittedly the
company
 whom paying more all of employees trying to be one of
this
 family. In conclusion,
company
 and
employee
 on the same path if they are making good profit they will grow. If no both of them will lose
company
 will lose business
also
staff
 will lose their
work
, so we have to
work
 together to get the best goals.
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