Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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has become

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have become

had become

became

was becoming

a trend that many companies publicise their products and services by organising the sports events. A few people believe that it is a good practice where both the company and society are

get

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getting

benefitted whilst others seem to be more sceptical. Despite

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, I think the advantages of

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approach far outweigh its disadvantages.

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with, the companies are financing sports events as a

marteking

the exchange of goods for an agreed sum of money

marketing

tool where

also

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a game is being promoted. It is not an easy task to

fund

come upon, as if by accident; meet with

find

any game because it needs millions of

dollars which

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dollars, which

is only possible when a giant entrepreneur comes in front to invest in the event. In

this

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way, both goals are targetted with one arrow as corporations advertise themselves as well as society gets a healthy environment,

for example

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, Scotiabank Arena has been openned by Scotiabank that organises matches on different times which not only entertains the people but

also

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gets the fame among its existing and potential customers that

this

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bank contributes to the societial work. Even the new players get the opportunity to show their talent where they get the chance to play with their seniors and the platform to prove their ability.

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, businesses find themselves in win-win situation where they are fulfilling their own goal of promotion while keeping the interest of the general public.

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this

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phenomenon

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has the dark side that cannot be avoided. There are

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a number

of the sponsors in the form of the companies that take the wrong advantage of

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custom. They introduce their low products and services in the market by taking the support of games which is really

impacts

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impacting

negatively on the watchers.

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the tobacco and liquor companies are promoting these activities for their self-interest.

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, Kingfisher company is the wine supply company that organises

number

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a number

of sports activities where the fans are encouraged to buy its drink which is totally a negative marketing strategy. These kinds of good impact the health

badly but

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badly, but

the

businesspersons

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business persons

just focus on their profits rather than the welfare of their customers. So, it can be noticed with these mindsets of

entreprenuers

someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it

entrepreneurs

entrepreneur's

entrepreneur

that sports events can

also

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be used in the favour of business class's interest. In conclusion, after

adressing

the place where a person or organization can be found or communicated with

addressing

both sides, it can be concluded that though

its

the thing named or in question

has some

drawbacks but

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drawbacks, but

still

advertisments

a public promotion of some product or service

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

414 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Sports sponsorship
financial support
athletes
brand visibility
awareness
commercialization
integrity
dependencies
corporate funds
unethical practices
strategic partnerships
communal relations
promote healthy lifestyles

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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