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The table compares the reviews of men and women, members of a city sports
club
, on the various activities performed in the
club
, amenities provided them along with the timings of the
club
. The data has been calibrated in percentage It is discernable that over the half proportion of males are very satisfied as compared to a
third
 of female in terms of different activities performed in the
club
. A significant difference of 25 per cent was observed in the response of both the members who are not satisfied with the activities. Two-fifth of male members are contended with the activities, which is five
percent
 more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 that of females. 3 per cent of women are not satisfied with the opening hours,
however
,
this
 value burgeoned to 72
percent
 in the case of very satisfied women. A quarter of females are in between the both. In case of males, 19
percent
 are satisfied 44
percent
 are more contended and 37
percent
 are not at all satisfied with the opening hours. Analysing
further
 a mere difference of 1
percent
 is observed between females and males in case of their satisfaction in the amenities provided by the
club
, accounted for 64
percent
 and 63
percent
 for men and women respectively. Men
vs
 women
percent
 for slightly lower satisfaction is accounted for 27 and 22. One tenth of male members are not satisfied with the facilities of the
club
. Overall in all the facilities, both the genders are very satisfied as compared to not satisfy.
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