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Some people say that a person’s success Is the result of the way they have been brought up by their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that a person's
success
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 in an adult life is a result of
upbringing
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 they received I do not quite agree with
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 view. In my opinion, the
success
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 of a person is very much a result of their hard
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 and perseverance. To commence with,
upbringing
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 is certainly important, but just because a child is brought up well, there is no guarantee that they will be successful in their adult life. There is no doubt that parents are the ultimate teachers and guides of a child, but many people grow up either without their parents or against their principal. There have been many triumph stories.
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, many wealthy businessmen were orphans and did not have any parental guidance, yet they have earned
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 from scratch. Talent, skills and hard
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 coupled with experience are important factors for any successful lifestyle. A good
upbringing
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 definitely makes a human to respect others and with love and empathy, but
success
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 in a person's life is the result of determination and hard
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. To conclude, doesn't matter whether an individual is born with a silver spoon in mouth or not, ultimately passion toward their
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 and pave way to
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. There are other factors that determine prosperity other than
upbringing
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.
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