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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Over the past few decades, the world has witnessed drastic changes in terms of lifestyle
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where most of the people are visiting supermarkets to purchase various kinds of locally produced and imported products.These
prodcuts
commodities offered for sale
products
 include
vegatable
edible seeds or roots or stems or leaves or bulbs or tubers or nonsweet fruits of any of numerous herbaceous plant
vegetables
vegetable
, fruits, dairies, canned foods etc.
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,
This
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 essay will discuss school of thoughts and will
also
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 throw light on my
opinion which
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opinion, which
 inclines towards that
super markets
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarkets
 should sell the products which are local goods rather than foreign goods.
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 with local products in supermarkets has many benefits rather than disadvantages,
first
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 it will
proivde
give something useful or necessary to
provide
 employment to the residents as most of the business people invest on the products which are
locllly
by a particular locality
locally
produce
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produced
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Second due
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Second, due
 to
this
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 the financial
conditon
a state at a particular time
condition
conditions
 of the individual will increase and can live a better life.
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, if we encourage agricultural farmers to cultivate the food that are competitive
to
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with
 imported food. One can benefit in terms of more
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of the good with less price when compared to imported expensive food. The fact that even if local good readiness is increased in supermarkets
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not only it will be available with
cheaper rate
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a cheaper rate
cheaper rates
, but
also
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 for importing the goods from other countries we can save our environmental
polltuion
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
 caused by air, water and roadways.
For instance
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, importing the goods from overseas
requried
necessary for relief or supply
required
require
 a huge fuel by which
evironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 may get polluted.
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 local production will enhance our
tradition
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traditional
 dishes rather than replace them with foreign dishes. To sum up, if we cultivate our local
foods there
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foods, there
 will be benefits to the government and people.I believe that there are numerous advantages for increasing local production within the country.
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