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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Money plays an indispensable role in everyone's
life
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;
however
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, it is often said that money cannot buy happiness. A wealthy person is not necessarily jubilant in his
life
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. I agree to the aforementioned statement and will discuss my views in the subsequent fragments. To commence with, satisfaction is the key factor to lead a hassle-free
life
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. It is commonly observed that if a human is happy with provided amenities,
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 money loose its importance in that case. To elaborate, there are many wealthy people, which are not happy in their
life
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, albeit provided with all the luxury items. To illustrate Sushasnt Singh Rajput, a talented and rich Bollywood actor, recently hangs himself to death in his apartment which clearly shows that a wealthy person is not guaranteed happiness.
On the other hand
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, the plethora of masses reckoned that only rich people can lead a happy
life
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 owing to the arduous situations, one faced in his
life
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. These types of people have less contention in
life
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, and always try to become rich as luxurious lifestyle allure them.
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, folks spend their whole
life
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 running behind to become rich and loose their kith and kins. What is more, people do not even pay attention to their health, and suffer many diseases and other detrimental problems namely depression. After pondering over the topic, I can conclude that
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 money is imperative in
life
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, satisfactory level plays a key role to live a joyful
life
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. If an individual is internally happy
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 only one can give importance to other things
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