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Some people believe that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, while other people think children should help with being unpaid.

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The topic of getting paid by doing
housework
 has been controversial. Some people believe that parents should give
money
 to children who help with
housework
 (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, whereas I agree with those who think that children should help with being unpaid. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that parents should give
money
 to children who help with
housework
 (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help. One of the most important reasons is that
this
 is one of the effective methods to teach children since in order to encourage them to be a tidy person that they can help themselves in the future.
For example
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it revealed that
money
 can be used as a teaching tool of the financial responsibility. Having said that
money
 plays a major role in encouraging children to do
housework
.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that children should help with being unpaid. The most significant reason is the face that children can help other people and be responsible for themselves
voluntary
Suggestion
voluntarily
.
This
 is because in the future, they will help other people without benefit and become responsible citizens. To illustrate
this
, in recent news, it has been reported that parents should delegate
housework
 to each child;
for example
 the eldest child should be responsible for doing the dishes while the rest ought to do the vacuuming. I agree with
this
 point because
housework
 is everyone’s duty. In conclusion, having considered both sides of
this
 issue,
although
 parents should give
money
 to children who help with
housework
, I agree with those who think that children should help with being unpaid.
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