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Some people believe that the government should support the funds for arts, while some other people suggest that the money should be used for public health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of allocating
money
 in
arts
Suggestion
the arts
 has been brought into focus recently, Whether governments should
support
 the funds in
arts
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the arts
 or in other practical ways has been
caused
Suggestion
causing
 a
heat
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heated
 debate. Both
view
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views
 will be discussed in
this
 essay, and my view is that government should
support
 the construction and conservation of
arts
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the arts
. People who
support
 allocating funds may put forth the following reasons.
Firstly
, public citizens have the right of entertaining themselves from appreciating various kinds of arts. Since, governments have the obligation to ensure the
emotion
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emotional
health
 of habitants, providing public facilities enable the public assess to some art works,
such
 as movies, music, dance and diverse art exhibitions, thereby improving people emotional quality.
Secondly
, arts is an important medium to record
to
Suggestion
for
 history. Appreciating
arts
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the arts
 enable people to learn about ancient or modern beliefs, costumes and festive activities,
as a result
, people can enhance their sense of belonging to the country. Those who oppose supporting investing
money
 in public
health
 and education may
also
 propose convincing arguments. One reason is that allocating
money
 in supporting
arts
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the arts
 can reduce the
money
 that should be invested to
support
 the public
health
 and education. Since public
health
 and education are two major parts of society and almost everyone has more or
less relationship
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less related
less relate
less relates
 with these parts. It is
of
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by
 imperial that government should make sure quite enough amount of
money
 needs to be invested in these two areas. Another point to consider is that, investing
money
 in
arts
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the arts
 is unnecessary, as it does not create any direct
profits benefit to
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profits to benefit
 the development of society. In conclusion,
although
 people have different views, I firmly believe that
government
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the government
 should allocate
money
 in supporting the construction and conservation of art.
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