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Some people believe that the difference between the lowest-paid jobs and highest-paid jobs should be reduced.

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Some people believe that the difference between the
lowest-paid
 jobs and highest-paid jobs should be reduced. What extent do you agree? Today, the
gap
 between the highest-paid jobs and
lowest
Suggestion
low
-paid jobs are a significant issue that many countries have been trying to solve. Many governments have been attempting to increase the minimum
wage
 to improve the population's quality of life. And bridge the
gap
 between the rich and the poor to have equality in society.
Although
 social balance is necessary, the paid
gap
 is arguably more important and sensible. In Thailand, the minimum
wage
 for people is 313-336 Baht per day or around 9,000-10,000 Bath per month (depending on the
work
). No professions exempt from the minimum
wage
. But in the case of degree-holding people. The minimum
wage
 is around 15,000-30,000 Bath per month. It depends on the branch of degree. Especially in high-skilled departments;
for example
, e-commerce, medical services, and engineering have been considered for high-paid. Those are highly-skilled and talented in their professional workings. They should be rewarded with the high-wages. Significantly, medical services workers earn an immense amount of money because they must
work
 under high pressure and requiring high skill for treating people.
Therefore
, I think that the employee pay rates should be considered based on their skills and working situation.
This
 condition is fair for everyone.
Furthermore
, the paid
gap
 should exist for competition. The competition will lead to skill development for people who have the
lowest-paid
 jobs. And encourage people to do better in their
work
 to get more money, which affects the quality of
work
.
Moreover
, the paid
gap
also
 encourages children to do their best to get high-paid jobs in the future. In conclusion, there are many public debates that it is more beneficial to reduce the difference between the highest-paid jobs and
lowest-paid
 jobs because of social balance. I believe that the pay
gap
 is fairer to society (the harder you
work
, the more you get money) and more essential for people's motivation.
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