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Some people say that seeing ancient objects in a museum can give the public a unique awareness of history. Others say that modern media such as films or talks on the internet, provide a more effective way for the public to learn about history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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History
 preserves the tradition, culture, ancient monuments and norms of a particular society
,
Accept space
,
so it should be the prime duty of all the nations to save its past.It is said by some masses that archives give us knowledge about the
history
, while others believe that internet and films are the fastest means of gathering information it.In my perspective, all the sources
such
 as museums, Documentaries and short talks are essential for learning
history
 and my viewpoints on issues will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs. On the one hand, when people visit art-gallery
then
 they get a chance to see the unique creations of our forefathers because it is observed that
history
 is written below the pictures of the walls in the galleries.
For instance
,
last
 year a man named Harinder Singh had visited a famous art gallery named Punjabi Bhavan which is located in Patiala and he was amazed to see the sword, utensils, hearth and he had
also
 read
history
 related to
this
 and shared his views in the newspaper through an article which inspired many people to visit that art gallery.
On the other hand
., these days there are other ways like internet and many short films in which
history
 is shown in a very attractive way. Many short documentaries are made by people in order to impart the knowledge of
history
.For example,
last
 year a general survey was conducted and its result was that these days seventy percent people rely on the internet and films because these are the fastest way of learning
history
. To recapitulate, I would like to write it should be the personal choice of any individual to select the form of learning
history
.
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