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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicle are allowed on the road. discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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Many Governments and Organization believe that, must be a a
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 without personal vehicle allowed on the roads. A
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 free
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 should be even one
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 per month.
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However there
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However, there
 are some people disagree for
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 project. In
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 essay we are going to share the advantages and disadvantage from
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 point.
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, admittedly we must have a
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 free
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 once every month, because
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 will hold and support our environment to rest, as we know vehicle one of the pollution source, especially on
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day
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, the remarkable increase in the number of cars in recent years An obvious negative impact on the environment,
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 as global warming, and global climate change,
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 the traffic jam, which is becoming huge, especially
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 rush hours.
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, the disadvantage of the
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-free
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 will affect the public transportation with all of
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 many numbers own
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 user ,
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 the public busses and subways specially on the rush hours, Another problem which is delay for work, for sure as we know all of us
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 is faster and more comfort than the public transportation,
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 will be abet problem for some people those leaving far than the public transportation stations
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 like subways stations, the only option for them will be a taxies even though will be over budget. In conclusion,
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 is very important for our daily needs, but
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 we have to take care of our world to reduce the pollution, In my opinion, we can make a
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-free
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 one per a month on the weekend days
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,
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 should be coming through our government
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, Philippine did
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 project and it was so helpful to reduce the pollution and traffic jam.
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