All jobs can be done equally well by a man and a woman. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of all the nature of some occupations exerts vital influence on the gender preference for
job holders
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jobholders
. Being generally fitter and stronger men have evident advantages over women in physically demanding work.
Although
recent decades have seen the barricades lifted for females serving in the military and police force in many countries, male soldiers and policemen are still playing various dominant roles simply due to their superiority body strength, endurance and speed on average, particularly for close combats in battlefield or assault, and rescue missions carried out by special forces,
By contrast
, midwives, as the name suggests, are rarely male professionals not only because of the traditions but
also
, more importantly, pregnant women’s desire for sexual privacy. Even for the occupations that do not show distinct gender preference for the staff, performance still varies from person to person because it largely depends on an individual’s attitudes and abilities rather than sex. Job commitment,
for example
, is often correlated to a person’s interests, job satisfaction, and life attitude towards the ideal balance between work and family responsibilities, while education and substantial industrial experience affect the necessary expertise for accomplishing the regular tasks of a particular position efficiently. The sexual equality in none of these,
however
, can be proved by statistical hard evidence across the industries, economic and political systems, and cultures around the world. In reality, it is hard to ensure
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performance review. After all
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not all performance assessments are based on quantitative indexes,
such
as defect rate, sales and working hours. Quantitative criteria, including the comments from supervisors and peers and customers’ feedback, are often used in modern human resource management in
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the
service industry,
such
as retailing and hospitality, or senior management positions. Many of these are prone to subjective opinions, which could be influenced by factors,
such
as internal and external interpersonal relationships and personalities
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