In conclusion, categorizing customers based on their age is an effective way to investigate their shopping habits. However, there are numbers of factors that could create the same impact on spending habits.

Wild animals are kept in zoos all over
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world. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract visitors. I believe that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative ways to see them. There are many good reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money for
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city. Visitors get chance to see wild animals that they would not see unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino
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,
for example
, are endangered and if we had no zoos they would die. Zoos care for these aminals and give us
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chance to see them.
Therefore
, we cannot underestimate the educational importance of zoos.
However
, many people feel that wild animals should be free. They should not be kept in cages and small areas in
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zoo.
This
is cruel for animal and they often die because they
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not in natural habitat. We frequently see
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a
the
news story about rare animals dying in zoos or getting sick because
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area is not big enough or suitable for wild animals like lions or polar bears.
Also
, these animals are unhappy and sometimes attack humans. Caging wild animals is unhealthy for the animals and is cruel. Both views put forward valid points,
however
, I strongly believe that zoos are no place for wild animals. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in their natural habitats in game parks or wildlife reserves.
Government
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The government
should look after the precious wild animals at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them. In conclusion,
although
people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals because they can earn money and educate people, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild animals on the internet and we can feel happy knowing that they are free.
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