Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefiting them as individuals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, education is the most important aspect of our life.
school
is
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a
good option for
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a
the
student to have a bright future.
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Student
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The student
A student
has an alternative way of choosing the learning platform.
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Most of
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the
people believe that
school
is the best way for teaching
student
to be good workers and citizens,
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rather than
others
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other
advantages.
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Personally, I strongly disagree with
this
statement. Begin with, the
first
reason why there are other advantages for studying at institute
instead
of teaching junior to be a good citizen.
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This is because in
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the
academy there are many subjects for
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a
the
graduate to choose. What kind of
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subject that they interested in
such
as
complusary
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compulsory
subject or art.
Moreover
, it can lead
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the
student to know themself rather than being
study
conditional that they can not do very well.
In addition
, when
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a
student noticed that they can do it smoothly
then
they will boost themself to be a genius person on that field.
For instance
, in my institution had a chance for me to select
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alternative
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the
althernative subject so I chose to
study
Chinese.
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After that
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I very enjoy and energetic every time that I studied.
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Then I usually prepare and practice it all my free time.
Furthermore
,
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The
second
reason is
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a
the
student will learn how to make
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a
friend to others and create a good relationship.
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Moreover,
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a
the
student shares their opinion that cause
student
will know each other behaviour
.
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For example
, my sister used to
study
homeschool, she did not have any friend. So my mom decided to move her to
study
at
school
that cause she had a good personality and be a social person. In conclusion,
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the
a
school can provide
study
in every section of education.
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It depends on
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the
student what they want to be.
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