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Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefiting them as individuals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, education is the most important aspect of our life.
school
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good option for
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the
student to have a bright future.
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Student
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The student
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 has an alternative way of choosing the learning platform.
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Most of
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people believe that
school
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 is the best way for teaching
student
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 to be good workers and citizens,
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rather than
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other
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Personally, I strongly disagree with
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 statement. Begin with, the
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 reason why there are other advantages for studying at institute
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 of teaching junior to be a good citizen.
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This is because in
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academy there are many subjects for
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a
the
graduate to choose. What kind of
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subject that they interested in
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 as
complusary
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compulsory
 subject or art.
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, it can lead
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student to know themself rather than being
study
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 conditional that they can not do very well.
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student noticed that they can do it smoothly
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 they will boost themself to be a genius person on that field.
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, in my institution had a chance for me to select
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alternative
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althernative subject so I chose to
study
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 Chinese.
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After that
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 I very enjoy and energetic every time that I studied.
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Then I usually prepare and practice it all my free time.
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the
student will learn how to make
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friend to others and create a good relationship.
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Moreover,
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a
the
student shares their opinion that cause
student
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 will know each other behaviour
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, my sister used to
study
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 homeschool, she did not have any friend. So my mom decided to move her to
study
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school
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 that cause she had a good personality and be a social person. In conclusion,
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the
a
school can provide
study
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 in every section of education.
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It depends on
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the
student what they want to be.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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