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A person should never make an important decision alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #decision
Decision
-making plays
an
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a
 significant role in one's
life
 as it can make or break a
person
's
life
.
Hence
, some people make decisions alone without
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the
involvement of anyone, not even family and friends, whereas other opine that an important
decision
 must be taken after a clear discussion with others. I agree
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apply
to a certain extent with the statement
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and the reasons for
this
 are that I believe it depends from
person
 to
person
. On the one hand, some of the population make resolutions individually because it gives them confidence and their
life
-a meaning. Making choices about what is essential for
oneselves
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ourselves
oneself
 allow them to be more independent and in charge of their
life
.
Moreover
, involving others will only put
second
 thoughts in the mind regarding their own original plan and they become sceptical.
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Furthermore
, typically, time is
is
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not squandered.
On the other hand
, most of the people consider
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the
involvement of others;
otherwise
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,
 it would be risky and will affect the family's
life
. The purpose of consulting others is to extend our knowledge and improve our judgements. So,
that
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the
decision
 is based on the best information available.
Moreover
, elders have experiences from their
life
, which can ultimately guide a
person
 what not to do.
For instance
, taking a big business
decision
 alone would be reckless and jeopardise
the
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a
person
's career. So, taking
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
 from others would cause no harm. In my ultimate analysis, both have its pros and cons. Henceforth, it depends on how big or serious
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the matter is to make a
decision
 alone or consult others.
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