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These days people pay more attention to artists (writers, painters and so on) and give less importance to science and technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays, people around the world study a great variety of subjects. some people argue that there is an increase in demand of artists like writers and painters as
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 art is getting popular
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science and research are
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losing
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importance
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. on one hand, people with creative art skills are getting tremendous attention from other folks due to their excellence and intriguing work. There is no doubt in the fact that with passing time
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 creativity
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 a man in awe. due to which their demand is increasing because it is relatively easy and
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 a lot of doors of occupation for people.
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artists
an artist
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 and can earn money and fame.
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, no one can deny the value of science in
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 world. it not only bring comfort in human life but
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 make it more reliable. A large number of adults choose science as a career because it asure as a safe future.
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