Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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education

and skills. People have

a different views

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different views

a different view

about

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job

involment

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involvement

. But I personally believe that

education

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high level

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high-level

job

. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view.

However

, every professional

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university degree. Even if you have enough skills to fulfil the

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requirment

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requirement

requirements

job

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degree

then

big companies will not hire you. There are many reasons why they are following

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rule.

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, if you have

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college degree

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company will be sure that you can easily

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handle

non technical

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matter

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than others.

Secondly

, university study

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practical

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plus

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world's 70% people who are

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report, 80%

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educated people can easily get high

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salary

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excellent

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non skilled

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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The relatively recent development of games on phones, computers, and TV consoles is extremely popular with people all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such electronic games?

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