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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed ?

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Today, the world has seen a significant rise in new
employement
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employment
 types. A lot of people are currently working on their own and they do not rely
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 a company or organisation to
work
. There are several reasons why people choose to be self-employed.
However
,
this
 practice
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 some disadvantages. People might find more benefits when choosing to be self-employed than when they are working with a company. Working by themselves allow them to
work
 in a flexible manner. When people
work
 within a company, they have to
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 schedules, duties and workplace procedures, whereas when people are self-employed, they can choose when, where and the way they want to
work
.
Furthermore
, they become their own boss, setting what goals and outcomes they want to achieve, without asking for approval or green light to a person.
By contrast
, people who
work
 within companies are limited, they can not take decisions by themselves and even worse, in some cases,
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hey are
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harassed
 and
misstreated
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mistreated
 by their bosses.
However
, to some extents, choosing to be self-employed might carry some drawbacks. Often times, people fail when they become self-employed, perhaps because of the lack of
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 or the lack of support from stakeholders or investors.
Secondly
,
this
 practice involves a great deal of time as people have to perform several duties at the same time.
For example
, being an accountant,
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 HR manager and a project manager. While performing all of these tasks, they might not have time to take vacations, sick or maternity leaves. In conclusion, there is no doubt of the benefits that being self-employed bring,
however
,
this
 approach is not always positive as people have to take a long journey before succeed and it carries many drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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