Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.
Nowadays, a few masses think that give I believe that, there are a plethora of reasons that it is better for old age person to live independently.
,
grandparents should stay with their infant and grandchildren are, Remove the comma
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However
, this
view is supported by a few people, other have a strong counter-argument, that old age grandparent should stay on their own. In my opinion, I believe that grandparents should be live together with their children and grandchildren. Both sides of this
debate will be discussed in this
essay before the reasonable conclusion is drawn.
To begin
with, due to a strong social bonding some member stays with their grandparents,
because they think parents are the most significant aspects of individual life. parents are those who were standing in their bad times and encouraged them. As a Remove the comma
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consequently
, they never feel that their guardian should live without their assistant. Replace the word
consequence
For instance
, According to a survey carried out by WHO, Those who live with their grandparents are better guided in a certain manner. as a result
, they better succeed in their life. Despite this
, staying with their parents make them s
ense of fulfilment, as, they think they haveAdd an article
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to
somthing
back to their guardian.
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something
On the other hand
, other parts of the community think that,
old age people have to live on their own. becauseRemove the comma
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,
they make more burden on their children to make a balance to manage their finance. Remove the comma
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For example
, Those grandparents earn nothing, although
, their children have spent on their medicines. Moreover
, as generation is becoming a
more smarter they do not cope up with them, eventually, misunderstanding arise in their daily conversations and it turns into a fight.
To conclude Change the article
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this
, after musing both sides of this
arguments, in my opinionChange the determiner
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,
However
, it is rational for me to stay in a joint family, as it would have several benefits for this
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