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ome people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Animals have been used repeatedly throughout the history of biometric research.
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, early greek physicist scientists
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 as Aristotle and Erasistratus were no more different in 300 BC. In recent years the campaign to lessen the suffering of animals and avoid animal experimentation are trending, which shows two opposite type of mindset about people, one who feels bad for poor animals and others who think about the importance of
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 experiments. In my perspective, animal testing is ethically and morally wrong. To enlighten the major reason about animal drug trials, there has been a plethora of the previous incidents where drugs have been tested on mice or rabbits and improved for the human body, which provided favourable results to cure life-threatening diseases.
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, it is an undeniable fact that nearly every medical breakthrough in
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ast 200 years has resulted directly from using animals.
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, researchers normally avoid taking risk of direct human trials since it can cause disaster.
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, in the 1950s famous American company introduced drug named DEG without animal trials, which was poisonous for humans but the company’s chief pharmacist and a chemist were not aware
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 that the result was heartbreaking, the preparation led to mass poisoning causing the death of approximately hundred people.
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, I support the people who hold an opinion against animal cruelty and think it is unacceptable to perform medical drug experiments on them. Debates on the ethics of animal testing have raged since the seventeenth century. Many people believe that animals are inferior to human kinds and results derived from
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 experiments may not be applicable to the human body.
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, the life of all creatures should be respected and we humans have no right to make animals suffer for our own benefits.
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, lab animals which got injured or diseased during the experiment are not treated right, there has been plenty of cases, where after completion of experiments they were purposely killed to reduce medical research costing. To recapitulate,
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 it is undoubtedly true that animal testing has myriad of benefits, it is inhuman and unjustifiable to cause suffering to animals for our selfishness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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