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wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
Money
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such
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helter and cloths.
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t is said by some individuals that wealth is not the only way to get contentment.
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n my perspective,
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oney can be the source of delights, but we can not buy everything with it because it depends on the right attitude of the people towards life.
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f a
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hen he can lead a luxurious lifestyle and visit different countries
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hen he travels diverse nations,
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hen he gets chance to see beautiful natural creations and man-made creations of the world which is the source of pleasure.
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oreover, a rich
person
 can get expensive treatment at the
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hospital
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lthough poor people die with disease and misery.
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or instance,
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t is generally seen that celebrities have
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ot of
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and they spend
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normous
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enormous
 amount of
money
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hich gives the impression that they fully enjoy.
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appiness of the
person
also
 depends upon them because some people are rich but they are not happy.
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o illustrate, one of my relatives had
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ot of
money
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ut he was lonely and depressed because his children left their house,
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o that
person
 can remain happy by involving himself in his favourite hobbies,
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ut he has chosen to live sadly. To recapitulate, I would like to write that every
person
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ut it is in his own hands.
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