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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Advancement was only possible for centuries due to life-changing inventions.
However
, some people argue that inventors are less essential
then
 doctors for the public. In
this
 essay, I will reason out why I do not agree with
this
 statement because if it was not for these inventions we would still be living in the dark ages.
Moreover
, for the medical practitioner to prescribe the medicines they need to be invented in the
first
 place. Whether it was Thomas Edison inventing the light bulb or Alexander Graham Bell introducing the telephone to the world, it changed the way humans lived. Undoubtedly one of the biggest is the invention of the world wide web which impacted millions of lives.
For example
, right from retail therapy to remote learning, from banking to entertainment it is all made possible at your fingertips due to these experts.
This
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asy way of living are extremely essential for
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society.
Furthermore
, medicine itself is an invention and scientists need to work tirelessly in the labs to brings these medicines to us. Their newer inventions in the field of science are the reason why doctors can administer those medicines to the people. The latest example is
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 the COVID 19 vaccines which a lot
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experts are working on and which will give
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great relief to the entire world. In conclusion, there are few who think that
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medical practitioners are more important than the
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society. I would like to reiterate that I do not support
this
 statement and feel that the inventors are equally important than the doctors if not more.
Submitted by Suneela Phatak on

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