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In some countries people rent accommodation while other buy their own houses. Does renting accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages than buying place?

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There is no denying that to
rent
 or to buy a property is a controversial matter that has been discussed for several experts in finance from our society. Some investors claim to buy a
house
 is not a good deal because it would be a liability
instead
 of an asset, once it only generates expenses.
Another
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 people say that to have your own
house
 is the best choice because you will have a
place
 to live regardless of what could happen. From my own standpoint, I believe the benefits of having a property are greater than the drawbacks. The
first
 benefit, in my opinion, is that in
case
 of a financial problem,
such
 as to be unemployed, you will not have
this
 expense, in
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, you will not have to pay the
rent
.
Moreover
, we know that law is pretty strict to people who do not pay their lease and the landlord will require the
house
 back in
case
 of debt.
Consequently
, there is a high risk to be without a home to live in
case
 of money issues. Another advantage is that we could rebuild the
house
 to fit better your needs.
Furthermore
, when you have your own
place
, we can choose your own furniture and to paint the rooms choosing the
colors
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 you most like. When you live in a rental
house
 your option is pretty limited due to the reason you will have to return the realty exactly the way you found it. Another benefit of purchasing a
house
 is that you will not need to leave the
house
 in
case
 the landlord requires you to do that. A disadvantage of owning a
place
 is in
case
 you want to live in another
house
 you will have to sell
yours
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your
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first
 to afford another one. One clear example is in apartments when your
neighbors
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 do not respect you and make a lot of noises during the day and night. In
case
 you decide to leave because you cannot deal with them anymore it will be more difficult and it would take more time than if it was a rental
place
. To sum up, in my view, the benefits of buying a
house
 are much better than to
rent
 one. Obviously, in
case
 do not have money to afford a
house
 the only option you will have is to
rent
 one.
However
, even knowing you could invest
this
 amount of money and gain high profits from it, to have your own
place
 is a safety that
assure
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 you will have a
house
 to live when you become elderly.
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