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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#diet #meals #life
It is well said by the individuals that in order to stay fit one must take proper
diet
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ood which is full of nutrients and vitamins can protect us from various diseases.
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 believe that
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steady
diet
 keeps us healthy,
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ut in order to stay fit people must involve themselves in exercises and
yoga
 which is becoming very popular these days.
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iet that includes fruits,
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egetables, meat and fish is considered proper
diet
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person
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proportionate
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roportinate manner,
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hen there are chances that he can combat with disease and recover fastly,
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or instance, one of my friend named Ramandeep was considered very healthy because she paid proper attention towards her
diet
 and two years ago, she had met with an accident and she got serious injuries,
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ut she recovered fastly because she had taken healthy
diet
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verall,
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t can be concluded that
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ealthy
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healthy
diet
 can help a
person
 to stay fit if any mishappening does not happen in the life of an individual.
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n
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people opine that exercises
also
 make a
person
 fit and healthy. These days many people have opted
yoga
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person
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,
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nd these days people are facing many problems
such
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and
yoga
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o illustrate, a survey was conducted by health experts and it had concluded that people find that
yoga
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xercise
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and activities
such
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,
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unning are gaining popularity among people because of its health benefits. To recapitulate,
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people should take
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egular
diet
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,
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ut they must do exercise and other activities because
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combination of both can make life happier and better.
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