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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people.Why might this be the case.Do you think it is a positive or negative situatio

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Ownership of a
house
 is gaining popularity across the world. I believe it to be extremely beneficial, not only because of
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omforts and financial benefits of owning a
house
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oming generation.
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his essay will explore how these mega advantages have the potential to outshine any drawback. There are many advantages
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this
 development.
Firstly
, the
house
 leads to a comfortable and luxurious life for the owners.
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s it protects the housekeepers from extremes of weather. Take an example of Ema Watson, a leading star of Hollywood, once cited about her
home
 as the best source of comfort for her.
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wning a
house
 is extremely convenient for people.
Secondly
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he
house
 owners are protected from a lot of expenses that are likely to occur in case of renting.
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s, while living on rent, people have to pay a lot of
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unjustified expenses demanded by the owner.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the UK government
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 revealed the 25 % rise of depression due
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to financial constraints
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among the people living in rented houses as opposed to those having their
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own
home
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ence,
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he rented houses can literally drain the finances.
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he most significant benefit of owning a
home
 is the security for future generation because it is an asset and will be beneficial for the children in future. To sum up, irrespective of certain drawbacks, I believe it owing a
home
 is extremely important in providing, not only a source of comfort and financial relief
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 but
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uture. So rented houses are not suitable.
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