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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children ) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people suggest that free
community
 service should be incorporated into high
school
 programmes and it is a great opportunity for pupils to build
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ood relationship with
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community
. I partly agree with
this
 idea and I will explain it in
this
 essay. On the one hand, doing voluntary jobs
such
 as teaching sports to younger children can have a positive impact on adolescents' personality development and can create a more friendly
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environment
 for
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.
In other words
, learning how to help others without asking payback enables teenagers to become a
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 person.
For example
, a recent study conducted in the US has shown the students who are willing to involve in
community
 service are generally more open-minded and have high social intelligence.
As a result
, those qualities are the main reasons why they tend to be more successful in
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work
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environment
 since they are great team players.
On the other hand
, there are drawbacks in doing too much
community
 works.
This
 is because
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high
school
 students usually have to spend 8 to 12 hours in
school
 and they might not have enough time to deal with extra work. Take Chinese high
school
 students as an example, they have to study about seven different subjects on average and do
homeworks
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homework
 after
school
, which can cause them approximately over 13 hours per day. In
this
 case, compulsory services would pose too much pressure on students since it is basically impossible to balance
school
 life and other physical work. In conclusion,
community
 service can be beneficial to students' personal growth.
However
, sometimes it would probably be stressful for them. Personally, I believe that contributing to the
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 would be
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 excellent choice as long as we put a limit on time and make sure it won't affect pupils
school
 grades.
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