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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, struggling with their busy life because of the speed rhythm of the lifecycle, people substitute home-cooked
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 by junk cuisine even their main meals. Certainly, take away cuisine allow people to save time,
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, the overconsumption could have an irreversible effect on our health. Fast
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 is an interesting alternative when we don’t have much time and money,
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its easy to prepare
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 in a few minutes it’s possible to rustle a sandwich or a pizza.
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, it’s available with a large range, in each corner there is a
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 shop with many choices, people can easily bolt down and turn back to work.
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, fast
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 is really tempting, it’s not expensive so that all categories get access, another advantage of fast dishes.
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, a junk meal has many drawbacks, the
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 one its poor quality, as it is not nutritious and rich on fat and bad carbs, our body can’t function well. the
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 disadvantage
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is that it’s a bad eating habit to teach to children, they still in their growing stage so they need to eat the rainbow to construct strong bones and grow up well.
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, there are many health problems among the obesity, in the USA more than 50% suffer from
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 problem, Adding cardiovascular diseases due to bad cholesterol, cancer and many other illnesses because of the chemical and
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 preservative. To conclude, fast snacks can help people to save time and money because it’s cheap and rapidly prepared, but the weightiness of the disadvantages is heavier than the advantages,
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 why it’s necessary to educate people about the quality of their
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, so they can stay in shape and have a healthier life.
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