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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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An increasing number of people are opting to start their own business by leaving the highly paid jobs in good companies.
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. People tend to leave their typical 9 to 5 monotonous jobs and want to do something creative and exciting in their lives to
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 their dreams.
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a person to start his own company.
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 and profitable organization and earning a handsome salary
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 if he is not allowed to take his own decisions or keep his
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to him, it may be frustrating at times. But
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many disadvantages as well.
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huge risk involved both at the initial stage as well as in the running phases. It is not always necessary that the business will turn out to be a profitable one, as there might be losses as well.
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t may involve more working hours and sometimes even sleepless nights at an early stage as everything has to be planned and organized by the person himself which may lead to serious health problems and family issues as well. In conclusion, The pros and cons in case of being self -employed goes hand in hand because even though it is a great idea of fulfilling one's dream but at times it involves lots of
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 as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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