IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Explain what ethnocentrism is and give an example from what you read, watched or experienced. Talk about why it is important to analyze and interact with a culture other than our own using the cultural elements (e.g. norms, standards) of that particular culture

Ethnocentrism is judging another
culture
Use synonyms
 based on the values and standards set in one's own
culture
Use synonyms
,
therefore
Linking Words
 believe your
culture
Use synonyms
 is superior to that of other people. I was born and raised in Nigeria, in my
culture
Use synonyms
 respect for the elderly Isvs pretty big deal, and it's typically shown when females kneel and men take a bow, It's
also
Linking Words
 shown when we call older people aunty and uncle even when we are not related. So upon getting to
U
Correct article usage
the
show examples
SA, I got to learn rather quickly that all of
that is
Linking Words
 only unique to my
culture
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 to me is an example of ethnocentrism, It doesn't mean other cultures don't respect their elderly we just happen to have different norms and values.
This
Linking Words
 difference in
culture
Use synonyms
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
believe is what makes us all unique, no one
culture
Use synonyms
 is weird, we all should just learn to appreciate our differences.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: