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With The Increasing Use And Development Of New Technology, Many Machine Are New Able To Do The Work Which People Used To Perform. What Are The Advantages And Disadvantages Of This Trend ?

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In
this
 day and age,
technology
 has taken over the world. From writing a letter to driving a car, everything is possible by a click of a button. The essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of how nowadays machines are able to perform human tasks.
Firstly
, in regards to the advantages of robots doing the work, many large companies around the world are investing in
next generation
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 machinery, to increase profits.
For example
, the automotive factories make each car from scratch by using robotic arms, in doing so they are able to mass-produce 70% more vehicles. The reason behind the high manufacturing
rate
 is because machines do not require a break, they can function for long hours.
Furthermore
,
technology
 is programmed to pick minor and massive errors, so each product is carefully checked and monitored by robots.
On the contrary
, there are many drawbacks of
technology
 taking over human duties. Due to the unprecedented times, we are already facing a worldwide recession, but with the addition of
technology
 gaining control, citizens are facing job layoffs.
For instance
, the retail industry is one of the hardest-hit businesses, as consumers are shopping online and do not require assistance by a human being.
Consequently
,
this
 has
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lead to
an
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ncrease
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increase
 in the unemployment
rate
 and poverty, as individuals are losing their jobs to computers and people have no money to survive. To conclude,
although
 there are many benefits of new
technology
 making tasks feasible at a rapid
rate
, it
also
 has drawbacks
such
 as high
rate
 of unemployment and penury.
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