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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?

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Be it a developed
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 or developing
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,
poverty
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 is a common issue. In
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the various factor contributing to the rise in
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ossible solution to solve the menace. Major factors contributing to
poverty
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 are unemployment, natural disaster and inadequate education.
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, due to unemployment
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there is no income in a family, due to which they cannot afford children’s education which is again a reason for unemployment.
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 has become a vicious circle owing to the rise in crime rates in a
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 as well. Every
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deal
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 with
poverty
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 differently. Many developed countries offer free healthcare and education to people under
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overty line. Countries like India, offer them food
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 minimal cost and introduce various schemes.
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, ensuring people under
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 get 100 days of assured work in a year which guarantees income and livelihood. In my view, I strongly believe that Government should take necessary actions to provide employment opportunities to the underserved people and provide them with more health and educational benefits that can move their life’s in a positive and healthy direction
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