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Not enough people realise the importance of natural world. What is the reason for people’s lack of awareness? How can people be made more aware?

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In the present world, humans do not recognize the essential need for nature. In
this
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such
 as illiteracy and lack of knowledge
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 the consequences. We are
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 going to provide
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solutions
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 conducting awareness campaigns and
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 materials.
Firstly
,
People
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 not understand that with the current technology and
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radiations
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 the weather is getting
effected
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 which
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 are affecting forests.
Moreover
,
due to
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 of education
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every citizen ,
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 not know the value of oxygen which is provided
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 trees and plants.
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, in recent studies, it has been declared that the
forests
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 area has been reduced to 70% in 2020 when compared to 2010.
Secondly
, The less knowledge of the disasters which
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 going to happen if the quality is destroyed and
also
 it reduces rainfall which causes the unavailability of water.
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, It is considered that if
this
 continues the rivers and lakes are going to dry out in the near future. It is necessary for the
people
 to get educated and know the results which are going to happen.
Additionally
, To educate the
people
 and make them realize we have to change the methods of teaching by conducting
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programs to teach
people
 in every corner of the world regarding the importance of type in our daily life and for the upcoming generation.
For instance
, there should
also
 be the
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 facilities and necessary equipment to reuse the plastic as it worsens the mother earth by emitting chemicals.
Moreover
, it has been proved that improving these can reduce the effects on the universe
up
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 to 90% and we can breathe in toxic-free weather. In conclusion,
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they can be reduced.
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task response
The essay addresses the task by discussing the reasons for people's lack of awareness of the importance of the natural world and suggesting solutions to raise awareness.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates some coherence and cohesion by presenting a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there are areas where the connection between ideas could be improved for better flow and clarity.
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