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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people these days wish to
travel
 on a vacation with family, friends and colleagues.
Therefore
, the choices are, whether to explore their own
country
 or
visit
 places outside the
country
. In my opinion, people should explore places and cultures of their own nation and contribute
in
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 increasing tourist count for their nation’s betterment. In the one hand, individuals planning for a holiday needs to pay attention
on
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 the budget required to
plan
 the trip.
Furthermore
, travelling to other states within the boundaries will cost lesser in comparison to foreign trips.
As a result
, visitors can pay more for luxury and can enjoy with minimal
travel
 expenses.
In addition
, travelling less can cause less fatigue and people can
travel
 with more energy and enthusiasm.
For example
, visiting a place that take
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ew hours of journey to reach, rather than spending two days travelling to a place
in
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abroad.
On the other hand
, abroad
visit
 needs prior bookings and one cannot
plan
 a short trip.
Therefore
, generally
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individuals opt for staying
long
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 and explore more.
In contrast
, visiting one’s own nation have the advantages of planning
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hort trip on
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short notice.
Hence
, it is not required to
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plan
 the journey and invest time to decide, whether the chosen place is good enough or not.
For example
, visiting
to
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Europe requires visa approval, stay bookings and planning, regarding what all places you wish to
visit
. To sum up, travelling to different parts of one’s own
country
 helps to contribute
for
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 your
country
’s tourism and let individuals put lesser effort to
plan
,
travel
 and explore.
Thus
, one must
visit
o
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their
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wn
country
in
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 holidays and not
the
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abroad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
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