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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people these days wish to
travel
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 on a vacation with family, friends and colleagues.
Therefore
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, the choices are, whether to explore their own
country
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 or
visit
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 places outside the
country
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. In my opinion, people should explore places and cultures of their own nation and contribute
in
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 increasing tourist count for their nation’s betterment. In the one hand, individuals planning for a holiday needs to pay attention
on
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 the budget required to
plan
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 the trip.
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, travelling to other states within the boundaries will cost lesser in comparison to foreign trips.
As a result
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, visitors can pay more for luxury and can enjoy with minimal
travel
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 expenses.
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, travelling less can cause less fatigue and people can
travel
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 with more energy and enthusiasm.
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, visiting a place that take
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ew hours of journey to reach, rather than spending two days travelling to a place
in
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abroad.
On the other hand
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, abroad
visit
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 needs prior bookings and one cannot
plan
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 a short trip.
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, generally
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,
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individuals opt for staying
long
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longer
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 and explore more.
In contrast
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, visiting one’s own nation have the advantages of planning
s
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a
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hort trip on
a
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short notice.
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, it is not required to
pre
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pre-plan
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plan
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 the journey and invest time to decide, whether the chosen place is good enough or not.
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, visiting
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Europe requires visa approval, stay bookings and planning, regarding what all places you wish to
visit
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. To sum up, travelling to different parts of one’s own
country
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 helps to contribute
for
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to
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 your
country
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’s tourism and let individuals put lesser effort to
plan
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,
travel
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 and explore.
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, one must
visit
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o
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their
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wn
country
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in
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on
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 holidays and not
the
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apply
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abroad.
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