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Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world. What is your opinion

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opulation believe that the protection of wild animals should be financially supported by us, in the other hand, some defend that focus should be made by spending
money
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 to help poor people who
lives
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 in certain locations wordly spread out. I totally agree that
money
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 should be spent in order to save the ones who are living in poor conditions. At
first
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, it is important to destinate support on foundations that help poor countries around the
world
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 with goodies and supplies
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 as Red Cross or Water for Life.
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 to the United Nations, more than 40 per cent of
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orld population is living with less than one hundred dollars for
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onth and are not able to pay for health assistance
of
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to access
fresh water
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freshwater
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.
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 that number is high, it would be worse
if
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 was not for the non
profitable
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 organizations which are maintained by donations around the
world
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.
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, but
not
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 less important, the ability to help our own species is a duty that must not be neglect. Without moving
money
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 to areas that are facing difficulties regarding structure or resources inhabitants would not be able to
sucessfully
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successfully
 surpass that situation. A research made in
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ast decade has shown that poor countries which were financially supported were able to invest more
money
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 on basic needs and provide better conditions of life for their population. To conclude, as it was explained, not only we should donate and support organizations that help people to deal with poverty around the
world
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 but we
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 must understand that help our own species should be a major achievement to
human kind
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humankind
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 before destinate energy and resources to other
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