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University students always focus on one specific subject, but some people think that universities should encourage their students to study a wide range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Advances in digital technology have led to significant changes in work practices and lifestyles. A growing number of people are now considering
distance
 education, which allows them to complete at home. In my opinion, traditional could not replace
distance
 education. Admittedly,
distance
 learning programs are fixable and convenient for students who can take
distance
 learning courses and study whatever and whenever they want. They do not need to attend lessons in a traditional
Besides
，they can choose online resources which are useful for them.
For example
, they can find journal articles by using digital libraries, If they have any questions in their studies, they can use search engines of some educational websites to find answers.
Distance
 learning can
also
 address educational inequality as people can attend lessons of renowned teachers of other cities on the Internet and have access to the same learning opportunities. The availability of learning resources differs from region to region, and some areas,
such
 as remote villages, fail to attract well-qualified and experienced instructors due to slow economic growth and poor living conditions. Another problem with e-learning students cannot concentrate on lessons without the supervision of teachers. Teachers during an online course may not be able to observe the responses of students unless they use the video chatting function. For
this
 reason, they are not able to intervene, even when students are distracted,
for example
, by a film or game online. If students are not able to understand class content, they will fail the exam. In conclusion,
distance
 education course imparts the same knowledge to students as conventional degree courses. It has some drawbacks,
such
 as is lack of interaction, so it not able to achieve the same learning outcomes as traditional learning.
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