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People in many countries do not wear their traditional costume. Some argue that they would forget their history and tradition. Do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, nowadays every member of society wants to enjoy the advancement in technology which has taken part all over the world. Because, of which people believe that an individual will forget their cultural values,
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 as wearing traditional clothes. Today, human wants to experiences every culture and choose which one is the best for them. To commence with, nowadays people travel abroad, to exemplify, mostly the person who has just finished his or her degree or it could be the scholars, in search of a better lifestyle and enhanced education system, but somehow land up opting the civilization of that country, leaving behind their own values and the root to which their procreators have been attached for ages.
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, they do not get enough time to join their minority community which is responsible for conducting all the rituals and festivals over there, which make the situation even worse.
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, individuals try to get accepted by the foreign society to avoid discrimination between them and the native people of that city or a country, in order to achieve
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, individuals have to give a ton of their time in learning about the different culture and ethical value that are accepted by the local people of that nation, because if a person fails in doing so, there is a good chance of them not getting acceptance by an organisation or an industry, which could lead to mental stress and in some cases it could be worse,
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, a human being committing suicide. To summaries, to enjoy the technology people often tend to forget their root value and culture along with time. Better job option coupled with no discrimination with them and the natives of that country.
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