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some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and that having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
Many opioniate that pursuing a
career
 that provides contentment is far superior
than
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one
 providing security. While others dismiss the grounds and believe that a secure placement is
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far way more practical. My belief is that the practicality of ensuring a stable
career
supercedes
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supersedes
 due to the volatile
job
 market and rising of costs living.
Firstly
, the economy has seen a decline in
job
 openings due to
the
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Covid
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COVID
 pandemic. Several organisations have resorted to laying off staff due to redundancy and the pool of unemployment has seen a significant rise.
This
 has led to an imbalanced ratio of
job
 availabilities to the number of applicants.
One
 who decides to gain employment based on
job
satisfaction
 that the position provides would find it to be a tedious,
ardous
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arduous
 task.
Secondly
, owing to the pandemic, the overall cost of daily
neccesities
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necessities
 and living has seen an increase. If
one
 is practical enough to ensure a steady paycheck is
recieved
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received
,
job
satisfaction
 would not matter as significantly. As the importance of ensuring the household requirements are met, people would not view
job
satisfaction
 as a priority. On the
one
 hand, pursuing a
career
 that realises
one
 potential through gainful employment would reap in
seveal
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several
 benefits and encourage employees to go the extra mile. Many surveys conducted have indicated
job
satisfaction
 to be of priority for productivity.
Hence
, happiness is beneficial
ffor
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for
 both employers and employees. In conclusion, while it is vital to pursue a
career
 that entails
satisfaction
 the current times that we are experiencing does not allow
one
 to be choosy. It would be wise to take up a secure position that helps to pay the bills and maybe
along side
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,
one
 could pursue their passion.
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