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Film is a less important form of art than literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Art
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 is a form of
expression
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. An
expression
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 can be manifested in many kinds of platforms,
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 as painting, literature, and
film
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.
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, many people argued that
film
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 is not as substantial as other arts.
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 essay disagrees with that view.
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, all forms of human
expression
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 are the result of creativity.
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,
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ilm contributes to the development of arts and humans' expressions. The
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 reason why a motion picture can not be underestimated because there is a huge hard work behind the scene. It is combining an abstract idea with the real world.
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, the Aquaman movie, which is categorized as a science-fiction
film
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. If you analyze the visual effect that they made, it is captivating and
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, in producing a show, there is an equal amount of creativity as much as old-style arts. Another supporting reason is that films' contributions to the growth of arts. Based on my knowledge, young people tend to like modern and sophisticated technology, which means other conventional
art
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 does not attract their interest.
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, fewer people are keen to go to
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rt museum because it is very boring,
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, many youths have more interest to go to the cinema just to see the visual effect of films. Unfortunately,
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 activity gains their curiosity in
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 and may attract their desire to learn about digital
art
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. Thence, films appear as a platform for creative young people to take part in the development of arts. If arts are constantly about painting and literature,
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 may lead to an extinction of human
expression
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. In conclusion, while some people still overlook films as a form of
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, personally, it is still a precious
art
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 that needs to be appreciated like others.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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