In some countries, at secondary at high school, there may be two or three streams of studies, academic or vocational. What are the advantages of this to the students and the society of putting students at the two streams at the age of 15?

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Online Shopping developed enormously within a couple of decades around the world due to its availability and variety of products. Major players are few,

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as Amazon, available in most of the international markets and

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country wise dominant players

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Ali express in China and Flipkart in India. These entities have

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trong marketing team and follow proven business tactics to grab new customers,

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as offering them a massive discount, which is incomparable to the price in the local market. The trend seriously hurts local players, because shoppers cannot offer

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low price, due to the profit share in the infrastructure, showroom maintenance and wages. We can have a discussion on the merits and demerits of the growth of online shopping,

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, Internet mart

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a platform to the customers and suppliers, whose needs are fulfilled just in a click of a button. A decade ago, a person living in

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mall town could not get

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ariety of goods and have to choose from less available option.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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