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Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings, do you think is a good thing?

#people #money #weddings
It is
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 proverb that marriages are made in heaven.It is said by some individuals people spend
alot
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a lot
 of
money
 on their weddings because they want to enjoy it.In my perspective, I personally believe that it is
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heer wastage of spending
money
 on weddings,but some people find pleasure in it.
To begin
 with,There are some people who do not have
money
,
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but take
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oan from banks and utilize that
money
 for weddings because they want to follow all the traditions customs and rituals to get acceptance in the society.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by Kartar Singh in some of the villages of
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Punjab and its result was that some of the farmers take
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oan on their farms in order to marry their girl happily,but they can give that
money
 to their daughter rather than spending it on marriages.
On the other hand
, some people opine that those people who
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