The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain in the healthcare system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The table illustrates the
number
of people travel abroad and the
reason
behind it from 1994 to 1998. Overall, the
number
of people who travelled abroad
,
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increased over time and in 1998 the
number
was highest.
Additionally
, people visited western Europe most and in 1998 the
number
was highest. Categorically, for the purpose of visit, spending holidays were the main
reason
and the count of people travelled for the ame increased from 1994 to 1998 and in 1994, 15246 people went abroad for the same. The
number
later increased by almost 5,500 in 1998 and remained as the op
reason
. The
number
of people travelled for business was almost same and that was around 3,100 which rose slowly over time and in 1998, the
number
was 3,957. For visiting friends and families, the trend was nearly similar to business category
although
, for other
reason
categories, the
number
increased at
first
and
then
there was a decline and in 1998, it was 990 which was nearly equal to 1994 in the same category. Moving on to the
next
part, most people preferred to visit western Europe only and that trend just slowed up a bit in 1995,
although
it elevated slowly after that. In 1994, almost 180,000 people visited western Europe and in 1998, the count was almost 250,000. The
number
of people who went to North America was very minimal in it increased from almost 500 people to around 1000 people and that was true for other areas
also
.
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