People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

There is no doubt that a majority of the people have been workaholic by the work culture of
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modern society.The argument goes with that very few people are capable of maintaining a balance between their profession and personal life and a lot of the working professionals are finding it difficult to achieve the balance.
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issue and the ways to mitigate
this
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of individual being working hard is the largest priority given for the career progression and job prospects.
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romotion cycle which the
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have to prove his ability and achieve the
next
higher position.
For instance
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of
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orkforce are rewarded by their long working hours by stretching during the night time.
Furthermore
,the employers are pushing employees to finish the target before the deadlines to increase
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productivity.
Consequently
,the force from upper
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management
directly replicated to the
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associates to work even on
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weekends
to hit the target. The most crucial solution to ameliorate the stress in the working environment and to achieve work-life balance is by providing various employee-friendly facilities for them. Child care and free cab facilities are some
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iniatives
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initiatives
where the employees can benefit from their employers.To illustrate,a number of corporate multinational companies already started giving these option to their workforce.
Besides
,the leave policy can be modified to include more vacation leaves per year in order to spend
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quality time with their families.
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has introduced parental leave to take care of the
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to improve the bonding between the parents and baby. In conclusion,two of the main causes of the individual spending more time on work is their attitude to grow faster in the career ladder and the
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force to finish the project without escalation.
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innovative leave policies and employee-friendly facilities.
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