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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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There is no doubt that a majority of the people have been workaholic by the work culture of
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modern society.The argument goes with that very few people are capable of maintaining a balance between their profession and personal life and a lot of the working professionals are finding it difficult to achieve the balance.
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 of individual being working hard is the largest priority given for the career progression and job prospects.
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romotion cycle which the
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orkforce are rewarded by their long working hours by stretching during the night time.
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,the employers are pushing employees to finish the target before the deadlines to increase
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productivity.
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 associates to work even on
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 to hit the target. The most crucial solution to ameliorate the stress in the working environment and to achieve work-life balance is by providing various employee-friendly facilities for them. Child care and free cab facilities are some
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 where the employees can benefit from their employers.To illustrate,a number of corporate multinational companies already started giving these option to their workforce.
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quality time with their families.
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 to improve the bonding between the parents and baby. In conclusion,two of the main causes of the individual spending more time on work is their attitude to grow faster in the career ladder and the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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