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More and more people use private cars instead of taking public transport. What are the reasons for this trend? How can the government encourage people to take public transport? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #cars #transport #trend #government
Car
 is one of the most popular means of
transport
 and because
this
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the people prefer to
use
 more
car
 than public transports.
This
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use
 more
car
 rather than buses or trains and give some suggestions about what the governments could do to make public
transport
 more attractive. There are some reasons that people enjoy to
use
 more cars.
First
 of all, travelling by
car
 is comfortable, especially after a long day of work. In Brazil, some cities,
for example
, the buses are the only type of public
transport
 and it is not comfortable to travel almost two hours standing when it has crowed. Another possible reason is that the private
car
 is faster than public
transport
. The public transports have to stop much time during the journey for passengers to get on and get off, and it makes the trip longer than by
car
. Fortunately, there are two possible ways to governments encourage people
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First
, at the rush hour,the governments could introduce more options for transports. If it has more public transports in services available to citizens it will not have crowed and passages will enjoy more the journey after a long day at work. Another suggestion some lines which do not stop in some stations. In Melbourne as an example, some lines stop in all station while their other train lines which will stop only on more popular stations or it goes straight to the city centre. It makes the journey by train faster than
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ar in Melbourne. In conclusion, travelling by
car
 are more comfortable and
also
 faster than some public transports.
However
, making available more alternatives to transports along with building lines which go straight to the city centres are some suggestion that the governments could do to encourage the residents
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • private cars
  • public transport
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • comfort
  • privacy
  • time-saving
  • reliable
  • efficient
  • traffic congestion
  • parking space
  • safety
  • security
  • affordability
  • cost-effectiveness
  • awareness
  • information
  • incentives
  • initiatives
  • government
  • improvement
  • infrastructure
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