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Test and examinations are a central feature of school systems in many countries. Do you think the educational benefits of testing outweigh any disadvantages?

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Nowadays, a majority of people argue that around the world, written and verbal exams have taken
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 main stage in schools. I firmly believe evaluation on the basis of marks is a necessity
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and a major contributor in
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ducation system, and in
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I will discuss its merits and demerits.
Firstly
, with the help of examination, the educational Institutes can
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differentiate
 between students, which can help them to address
student
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weakness
weaknesses
. Through marks, a
student
 calibre can be judged, helping teachers to create a future path for each
student
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For example
, if a
student
 not performed well in physics, extra classes can be conducted after school hours to enhance their knowledge. In
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addition
, Annual scores
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 suggest children interest in a particular subject, which can be its potential profession in future. Schools can help
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ndividual to grow in that particular field.
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, evaluating on the basis of score can helps schools to differentiate between every
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, and guide them
accordingly
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On the other hand
, there are many who argue that annual mark systems give mental
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harassment
 to students. Effecting their confidence and inducing stress, which ultimately lowers their morale.
However
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chool is to prepare their students for the real world, filled with all sorts of hardship and difficulties. Exams
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 students to grow mentally stronger. It
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 their cognitive, logical and emotional skills. After a whole year of hard work, when a
student
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, confidence is boosted.
This
 courage helps him to tackle the world fearlessly. To
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conclude
, Examination and tests help
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chool to find
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students
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clearly
 outweighs the demerits.
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