Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

The number of vegetarians in a community may depend on various factors,
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the traditions of the country, habits and customs. My view though is not all people will become vegetarians, but a majority might and many others will reduce their intake of
meat
as part of their diet or not eat
meat
at all. Some people become vegetarians because they believe that
this
will benefit their health. Undoubtedly, eating too much
meat
, especially too much red
meat
, is not to be recommended.
Moreover
, the fact that there are healthy populations in some parts of the world where no one eats
meat
proves that it is not, as some people claim, an essential part of the human diet.
However
, it is important to ensure that enough protein,
for example
, is included in the diet from other sources. Where vegetarianism is not a tradition,
this
may require some careful planning. In my experience, it is quite common for people to become vegetarians because they feel that it is selfish to eat
meat
or because
meat
production increases global warming. They may
also
strongly believe that if no one ate
meat
, there would be no food shortage
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because
meat
production uses up food resources.
This
idealistic point of view is very attractive, but it is hard to judge whether it is in fact correct. Personally, I think that being a vegetarian is a good idea in principle as there are proven health benefits and probably social benefits as well.
However
,
vegetariansim
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vegetarianism
vegetarians
does not suit everybody, and I doubt whether it will ever be universal among all people.
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