Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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information about the

proportion

of people that owned and paid for

accommodattion

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accommodation

in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. Overall, the percentages of households who owned

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rented

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accommodation

varied significantly, in 1971 the same percentage of people were owning and renting

accommodation

. By 1918, only 20% of households owned

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accommodation

Although

by 1939

this

number rose about 10% it remained the same until 1953. After

this

year,

this

figure increased considerably and by 2001 it reached the highest

proportion

at almost 70%.

However

, In 2011, the

proportion

of people who owned

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accommodation

decreased

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around 8%.

By contrast

, in 1918, the

proportion

of households that rented

accommodation

was approximately

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80%. During 1939 and 1953, the households owning and renting

accommodation

remained stable, with 30% and 69% respectively.

Also

, by 1971 the same

proportion

of people were renting and owing

accommodation

with 50% of households.

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