Instructions Read the question below and write a letter. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club. Write a letter to the manager of the golf club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you could start

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

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letter with regards to your recent advertisement about a part-time

job

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in a golf

club

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, which is related to responsibilities

such

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as golf

club

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& carts maintenance. Currently, I am studying for my commerce graduation and have ample

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apply

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time for pursuing other activities, I have recently shifted to

this

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city because in my hometown there were no good colleges and

job

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opportunities. And to support my college fees and daily expenses I am looking for

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job

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a job

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. Back in my town, I was employed at

First

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Sports

Club

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which has a huge playground for Cricket, Football & Tennis . My

job

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was

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apply

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ground maintenance , where I used to manage run water sprinklers on a timely basis. Keeping ground covered in case of rains &

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make sure the field is dry enough for playing conditions. Everyone at

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club

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the club

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used to be amazed

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skills because using internet technology I used to keep a check on weathers &

also

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I am sports fan from my childhood so I used to arrange ground fields

accordingly

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which made visitors happier. I have joined Mithibai college a month back which is just 10 minutes walk from your

club

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and well aware of my study

schedules

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so that it doesn’t affect any part of

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job

Correct pronoun usage

my job

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schedule. I can start as soon as you want. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Girish Watwani

girish.watwani2008Fri Sep 11 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

240 words

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