Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is argued that sports professionals that are successful should be paid much more than those in other important professions. While some believe
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others say it is quite unfair. Both views will be discussed in
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, I will be advocating that it is unfair to the other professions that do not earn as much as the
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and women.
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make more money in their careers because
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it takes talent to do what they do. When watching a match, one might think that it is easy to replicate the exact actions of a pro,
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, it is not. Research has shown that many of these organisations have failed by just picking the wrong talent.
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, there have been great players of
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generation who have proven their worth in entertaining and in their use of
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abilities. The likes of, C. Ronaldo, Messi and even Pele.
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the exceptional ability to bring a win and make fans happy
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, they have been quite predominant in their various clubs and leagues.
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, those involved in the other important jobs,
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as; medicine, engineering and law. Should be paid much more for their hard work in attaining that specific degree and
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for their level of specialisation. These occupations are not as fun as sports,
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society because the future of a country might be dependent on them. To
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, let us take COVID-19 as an example, underpaid doctors were at the forefront of
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outbreak, treating and preventing the
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most athletes were self-isolating at home and surfing the internet or social
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many doctors died in the line of duty, the ones that lived still did not get a raise.
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has shown that it is actually unfair that only athletes are paid very high wages. In conclusion, sports is very entertaining to watch and, in fact, one needs
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alent to become a pro.
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, I believe that other jobs should be paid much more than athletes because the future of the world could depend on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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