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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

#countries #dangers
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Nowadays, our past-faced
world
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 has developed many harmful effects
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 our surroundings. Global warming is the most dangerous conundrum we are encountering right now.
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 our
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 has been a competitive globally
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 our earth has been endangered. Most of the people today are conducting preventive measures to alleviate the cause of
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etrimental effect of global warming
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 as planting more trees, recycling useful things. The government will have a huge contribution to
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 global warming as well. Global warming is a destruction of our ozone layer through the carbon monoxide in our air the earth temperature is at risk. Our concern citizens are taking the lead to plant more trees
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especially on those places with a lot of deforestation occurred. They said
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“Trees are lungs of
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arth”. The more trees plant we have the better our
world
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 to have a non-polluted
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. Trees
as well as plants
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 are
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ood source of oxygen as it
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absorb
 the poisonous carbon monoxide and
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 the oxygen for the people.
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, recycling things can be a good idea so that less production of nonbiodegrablestuff will
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. On
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xample of
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 is our village have a routine recycle program once a month. All things that can be recycled will be collected and create
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arts and crafts that could be able to sell. The funds will be donated to the chosen charity. Hitting two birds in one stone, helping the environment as well as mankind. The government should implement
a hefty fines
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 for those company that will abide
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the law in polluting our environment. Overall, our
world
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 is endangered because of the adverse effect of human deeds. If we could only do
an outstanding efforts
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 to be able to lessen
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global warming
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 It will be a better place to live in.
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